tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1859940184293909528.post3156161151371676253..comments2023-04-28T04:20:05.766-07:00Comments on WRITER on WRITING: Can You Describe the Suspect?Virtual Strangerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01040333093180694172noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1859940184293909528.post-55994540361942523192017-05-17T21:31:12.494-07:002017-05-17T21:31:12.494-07:00I find this post intriguing as I just reread both ...I find this post intriguing as I just reread both 14 and The Fold. This time through, without the adrenaline rush of getting to solution of the story, I noticed a great deal of unnecessary description. Nearly all of it was commentary on the attractiveness of your various female characters. For instance, I know more about Sasha's other dimensional hair than I do about her personality and professional background. That seems odd.<br />In 14, constant reference to Mandy as a blonde farmer's daughter pulls me out of what at other times is a thrilling narrative.<br />A note from your female fans: we like your books, but if Jamie, Sasha and Ann had fully realized personalities, we would be all in. Develop them like you develop Mike and Reggie's friendship, and you will have our gratified and our continued purchases. Seawenchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07306794138141207197noreply@blogger.com